Rough Cut - Miss Georgiou

Rough Cut

Introduction

Now that we have completed a rough cut of our thriller opening it is necessary that we take action in to getting feedback to how we can make improvements. Audience feedback is always important when making anything as they have a very big impact on how you are able to make improvements. We are able to see where we have made mistakes or could change things slightly to make it more appealing to our audience. In our own group we have been oblivious to how we could make certain improvements and having an outsiders perspective broadens our knowledge.

We receive our audience feedback from posting our rough cut on youtube and gaining comments from various people. I have also shown my rough cut to the whole of my media class getting positive and negative comments from my teachers and fellow students. I where also able to look back on our questionnaires and use them to incorporate a new range of questions to ask friends and family what they thought of my thriller opening. I asked my sister Emily Emmerson, 15 years of age a number of questions one of them was. 

Would you carry on watching this if it was a feature length film?

She replied with: Yes because the story seems interesting and i want to know more about the character Cameron and what happens to Harmony at the end.

This shows me that we have been successful with connecting to our target audience which was aimed at people ages 15 and above.

Feedback

Here we see two opinions taken from our thriller opening on you tube. Kerry Boyne has stated that she thinks the narrative is successful as she believes it engages the audience this is something we planed to achieve while planning and making our thriller opening as we included a variety of characters that each had a specific role within our thriller. A constructive comment she also gave us was that we should add more low-key lighting which is something I agree on as when the character Cameron is committing suicide the lighting should be darker and gloomy to build suspense for the audience. 

Here we are able to see two comments, one from Amy-Michaela Sowerby and another from Malu Pillai. Amy mentions that we have used a good amount of variation in our shots. She has mentioned adding a sound effect when Cameron's character appears behind Harmony at the end of our thriller opening. I agree that this would shock the audience even more by adding a high-pitched noise that could even scare the audience a little, making them feel a lot of adrenaline. Malu also like the idea of our narrative which indicates to us that using a mentally unstable character was a successful choice to make. She also states that darker filters should be used which I agree with as I think it will help us when creating a very suspenseful atmosphere.

Bettie states that the editing is well presented in our thriller. The smooth crossover transition we used in our thriller has been successful in achieving an overall smooth opening thriller that flows well. She also suggests that we should make the credits longer in our film as they are hard to see which I agree with. Its important for an audience to be able to see who is in our film and who is directing it etc etc. This is why we should change our opening credits to make them longer and easier to read.

Conclusion

Overall our thriller opening seems to have been rather successful at intriguing our audience and making them shocked and full of suspense at some points. Although we now have realised that there are a number of things we can improve on and this can be how we make even better improvements on our thriller opening by making the atmosphere overall alot more shocking and thrilling